Writing Without Limits

I’m selling my old car on the local classifieds site and spent a week getting the ad written and tweaked and workshopped and proofread for maximum effect. Sure, it was pushing 600 words, but I wanted to sell with the heart! And disclose why this car is such a great buy! And the fun times we’d had together!

Can you see what’s coming?

I uploaded all that text into the classified listing last night, and thought, “Oh. That is just waaaaay too much copy and I look like a crazy person.”  So I did some edits on the fly, but I just can’t kill my darlings and let the old ad go. So here’s the text of the draft (masterpiece) and here’s the link to the actual listing to buy my car.

It’s still a little tldr but I can guarantee it’s the most-revised ad in the history of KSL.com.

 

New Car!

After a couple years of entertaining the idea, a year of really thinking it would be nice, 6 months of looking online, and 3 months of looking in person, I decided to replace my 14-year-old Ford Focus with something that can drive better through the snow and won’t leave me stranded at the side of the road.

What other choice did an outdoorsy person have but a Subaru?

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It’s a handsome beige (and still fits in the garage, whew):
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And it has a two-tone interior…
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That can haul at least one dubious cat:
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